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Post by xedenxbnrx on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:10 am

Hehe, just a little something I wrote a while back.


you say there is no god.
there is a god.
but you say his force isn't in the spirit of his existence
but in the beauty of his creations.
the world and the heavens and the perfectionist details.
the ever-lasting complexity of life and death.
a universe full of rich elements for the senses.
and meaning.
destined or unintended, meaning rejoices our minds
and fills us with hope and purpose.

its beauty.
there is no god, you say.
he lives for his gift and dissolves in it.
no evidence can conjure him and bring him to life.
any picture--or voice--available to man is an illusion
of something that's transformed into matter.

it is useless, you say, to worship the nonexistent.
he gave us life and life we should live.
he gave us nature and nature we should admire.
we can't call him, touch him, blame him, love him.
he isn't virtue nor is he sin.
he's not in our laughs nor in our sorrowful tears.
he isn't here.
we are here.
our souls are here.

you say, and i listen.
i listen but i reject
because truth hurts the most when it pokes at our insides.
i listen with an open mind but a closed will for assimilation.
and while i breathe the air and feel my pulse,
i'll think of you, my god,
and your nonexistent words
to make them my own,
and hope for your impossible death.
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Post by Soylent Blue on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:40 am

Love it. I like the contradicting style you used at the beginning.

My favorite line "Because truth hurts the most when it pokes at our insides."

A little confused about the meaning of the poem as a whole.
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Post by xedenxbnrx on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:57 am

I like that you actually analyzed this Razz Thank you.

Yeah, the real meaning has nothing to do with God, actually.
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Post by mortified_penguin on Thu Feb 24, 2011 10:33 am

Excellent work, rather impressive if I do say so myself. I like the contracting styles, and the little whisper lines, where it's almost like someone is whispering it in you ear. You're very talented, keep it up.

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Post by xedenxbnrx on Thu Feb 24, 2011 11:33 am

Wow penguin, you really think so? I don't consider myself very artistic, so this means a lot to me. Thank you.
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Post by TheMissingSock on Thu Feb 24, 2011 12:30 pm

xedenxbnrx wrote:I like that you actually analyzed this Razz Thank you.

Yeah, the real meaning has nothing to do with God, actually.
Hmmm, yeah, I kinda saw that to. I thought it was about god but then I thought, maybe it's like hope? But then I was like is it about love? Is it about humans? It's a poem that really made me think because it had so much put into it! It's a really wonderful poem, and although I'm still not quite sure exactly what it's about, it really did twist my heart a little! It was wonderful!

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Post by xedenxbnrx on Thu Feb 24, 2011 1:06 pm

Thank you, Sock!

I guess you can look at it from a broad perspective, but this poem is actually based on something specific that you wouldn't be able to figure out unless I told you.
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Post by Balahs on Thu Feb 24, 2011 4:53 pm

Wow, Thats really great. so great i read it in a morgan freeman voice!
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Post by BMTH on Thu Feb 24, 2011 6:10 pm

Wow, really good

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Post by undercover_walrus on Thu Feb 24, 2011 6:13 pm

pretty good for a... *breathes heavily through nose* XEDENXBNRX!

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Post by xedenxbnrx on Fri Feb 25, 2011 1:20 am

@Blahs - Hahaha thanks Very Happy

@Horizon - Thank you Smile

@Walrus - You guys didn't think I could write poetry, did ya? trollsta
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Post by BMTH on Fri Feb 25, 2011 8:53 pm

I envy your writing skills. Me and my friend are going to try to start a band, but I'm no good at writing lyrics.

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Post by undercover_walrus on Sat Feb 26, 2011 12:41 am

Bring me the Horizon wrote:I envy your writing skills. Me and my friend are going to try to start a band, but I'm no good at writing lyrics.

What's it gonna be called? I think that Horizon The Me Bring is a good name.

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Post by undercover_walrus on Sat Feb 26, 2011 12:42 am

xedenxbnrx wrote:@Blahs - Hahaha thanks Very Happy

@Horizon - Thank you Smile

@Walrus - You guys didn't think I could write poetry, did ya? trollsta

I didn't even read it trollsta

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Post by Soylent Blue on Sat Feb 26, 2011 12:47 am

That's because you don't read poetry walrus. You bleed it.

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Post by xedenxbnrx on Sat Feb 26, 2011 12:38 pm

@Horizon - Cool! Maybe I could be your lyricist, haha! I've always wanted to be in a band Razz @Walrus - I hate you trollsta [no flame]
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